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  • Miss morphine

    Miss morphine (100)

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    What would make it better: a few more metaphors
    But, its pretty good other than a few of the lines are a bit cliche'
    i have never been able to write in this format.
    but, i love the concept
    and the last lines amazing.
    February 28th, 2008 at 04:54am
  • thefemalegreenday

    thefemalegreenday (100)

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    AW! =D thats bootiful, I almost shed a tear your so amazing =]
    I love you too.
    February 28th, 2008 at 04:53am
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