"Friendly" Suicide - Comments

V I am so sorry!

Oh. My. Gee.
YOU MADE ME CRY.

V thanks,this was like,my very first poem and my most loved XD

I like lost most of my faith in humanity because nobody gives a damn anymore-_- i like this even though it made me frown at society

V thanks!! :)
the idea of her pulling out the hair was that she was driven so far because of those "friends" and it let her feel more pain,but i get what ya mean :)

There is one thing I love about this poem, and one thing I don't.

I love the way you do stanza four to five, with She jumps. And the next stanza after it rhymes and flows perfectly. Stanza three is repetitious and needs different words and actions. maybe tell us WHY she's pulling out her hair instead of just giving us the physical description you already wrote; otherwise, you're just telling us things about the character we already know.

I still love the enjambment in stanza four and five though!

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This poem is really good. I like how you called her friends "they".

V thanks :D

I absolutely loved this poem. It's so emotional and powerful. It's cruel to see what people do to other people. Keep on writing. You're really good [:

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I liked this poem very much :O It's disgusting how there are people who don't give a shit if they hurt someone and although sometimes they don't realize what a bad comment can do, the ones who still feel proud of it are pure animals. I LOVED THIS :) very talented.

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awesome poem
really gud
I luv it

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sorry for nearly making you cry!

oh wow, this is amazingly powerful, almost brought a tear to my eye, fabulous , relly relly good!

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This is...Powerful.
I say that because in our world of today Cyber Bullying is a terrible act which has caused countless Suicides. It's saddening. Thank our government for making it a federal crime. I do have one thing for criticism, if you don't mind?

"Neck around the rope."

I had to reread this twice before I realized you meant Rope around her neck. I'd try to reword it just a little bit. Some suggestions?

"Rope around her neck"
Or
"Neck wrapped with rope"

But over all? Excellent emotion and feel. Amazing. Keep writing!
~Brias

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Thats really powerful. This is sad that it happens all the time.
but you have an interesting way of explaining whats happening. its hard to write something like this unless you really know the feeling, which can make it even harder to actually write