Nice poem. All I have to say is, watch when you're changed tenses. Example:
"If you told your story
how many will listen?
If you cried
who will come to save you from your saddness?"
It'd either be, "If you tell your story, How many will listen?" or "If you told your story, How many would listen?"
Oh, and because of spell check... It's 'sadness'.
I really like the poem though! It's deep.
"If you told your story
how many will listen?
If you cried
who will come to save you from your saddness?"
It'd either be, "If you tell your story, How many will listen?" or "If you told your story, How many would listen?"
Oh, and because of spell check... It's 'sadness'.
I really like the poem though! It's deep.