Anyone but me - Comments

This really shows your lyrical sense and I love it.
You have such wonderful imagery language.
The emotion in this is overwhelming but in a good way.

This was beautiful. Especially the second paragraph. I could really feel the emotions, and the metaphors you used were wonderful. There were a few grammar problems, but oh! I loved this. (:

This is good its a little choppy in places but I think thats a good thing, pomes don't always have to rhym to be good and I think this is one of the better ones I've seen

I like the fact that I can feel the pain you're going through in this poem you did well and I think it would make a fine song

That's sad... but very pretty. =)

This is so sad, but really good. (: