Incredible.
I love your adjectives, such as "rusty knives." Also, your contrasting nouns really add some insight into your writing style. I especially love "fragile heart...stone." and "The numbing pain...feel." They are opposites, but still add to the poem in a way that isn't contradictory but contrasting. The ending lines are the most powerful: a call for help. That reaches even the hardest heart, and they finish the poem in an amazing bang.
I love your adjectives, such as "rusty knives." Also, your contrasting nouns really add some insight into your writing style. I especially love "fragile heart...stone." and "The numbing pain...feel." They are opposites, but still add to the poem in a way that isn't contradictory but contrasting. The ending lines are the most powerful: a call for help. That reaches even the hardest heart, and they finish the poem in an amazing bang.