You Are My Fall - Comments

I enjoyed reading this so much! great poem (:

I very much enjoy your gothic, somewhat macabre style. I love anything that reminds me of Poe. I also found your word choice to be interesting, and though you did repetition, it didn't seem redundant. One thing I can recommend is more imagery, just to heighten the emotion of the piece. Besides that, I can't name much else you can improve upon. Great work, dearie.

. .. ...i LoVe it. x)

I really like this and the idea behind it. The rhyming goes well with the poem and adds to the flow. A few things I think might have made it better (or could have over complicated the poem), is adding a wider range of vocabulary. I like the way this is worded and I think it adds to it but I also think adding some more vocab could have added to the poem as well. Also the third stanza you go out of the stanza formation you have set up. I like the extra lines you added but it messed with the flow slightly for me and because you repeat those lines later anyways, maybe you don't need them there?
Anyways, despite my advice I enjoyed the poem. Well done :)

This is extremely beautiful.
You are very talented!
I love your choice of words,
and the way it flows.
Great job (:

Wowzers. I love it. Awesome job!