Liar - Comments

Again, I think you use rhyme really effectively. And the way you write this, I feel pity for the narrator despite her flaws. Her self-loathing (If I can call it that) really shines through and you capture that well. I also think her 'last lie' of 'I will always be here for you' is really sad and a great way to end the poem on such a melancholy image.

the feeling of dself hatred and darkness in ones self is shown in this emtremely well i lvoe it

[i]I am covered in dirt, blood ,and lies[/i]

This line leaves the biggest impression on me. I like it. Well done.

i like the second half the best. its got more impact and point. the beginning really sets it up tho. good job.

I like how it was too he point, but explained the story. It was bold. I could understand how you feel. :arms: