Good poem.
October 7th, 2011 at 03:31am
Eeeeeeeeeehhh... it's ok, I guess. There's just something missing from it. The words were alright, I suppose, but you lack the "Umph" into it. The emotion is lacking. I see your words, but I don't feel them.
They just seem like words to me, nothing more. Pour some more emotion into it. Dazzle me.