Ashley's Song - Comments

  • PoopInYourPantsFunny

    PoopInYourPantsFunny (100)

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    OMG I love this soooooooooooooo much, this is a perfect poem, all the poems on mibba are so depressing, short and not well written, this is not depressing, the length a poem should be, and amazingly written. I loooove it!. Make more people read this, make em! The rhyming is perfect, its a unique poem, feels like you are getting to know Ashley, even tho the reader knows so little about her, you get to know her personality, Beautiful poem, make more poeple read it!
    November 6th, 2011 at 02:34am
  • Cal

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    This is good, but I think if you were to break some of the lines in half it'd have more impact
    November 6th, 2011 at 02:04am