The title caught my eye, here. Eidolon. What a lovely word. I'm impressed, because you managed to convey the most eerie, lovely mood with this poem. I would suggest perhaps having more variety in your choice of words? 'Light', 'Day', 'Hollow', 'Vanish'... They're all pretty common words in poetry. I hear that kind of imagery far too often, which is why I'm so impressed that this spoke to me as being a particularly unique sort of story. Overall I quite liked it. Thank you.
November 13th, 2011 at 12:05am