Forget-Me-Nots - Comments

I love it!! If ou want it to sound a bit smoother though, try adopting a rhyming pattern

Thanks for the advice!!! I'll try using a beat next time. :D

this is really quite good, if u wanna make it flow easier trying ryhimg more and making sure it has the same beat to it. But honestly I think ur doing great all on ur own. If u keep writing, ur skills will improve, it a proven fact :) <3 very delightful to read

Your writing skills are amazing.

I still think I need advice even though you might think it's great. I want to be perfect. Or at least close.

I really really like this. It's actually really amazing so you certainly don't need advice.
I love it (:

I have to say this was a REALLY good poem. I think you did an amazing job! =)

Pffffttttt you don't need my advice! This was incredible! Wayyyyy better than me silly goose! :P I love the extended metaphor, and the unique structure had me totally into it. To be honest with you I get boooooooorrrrreeeed of the poetry on here, for it often isn't art. This was honest, well written, well put together, and beautiful. You have a talent. :) Don't ever stop writing.

I like this actually. You have a good sense of structure to make your poem interesting to look at as well, it\s something I haven't been able to master :P But since you wanted help I'll tell you a few things that you should try, they may, or may not, work for you.
Use a thesaurus: this helps spice up your vocabulary and makes the reading interesting. Though make sure the words you use keep in tone with the piece! Also try not to repeat words or clusters of words in the same stanza, I noticed it on a couple of yours. While it doesn't kill the poem it does interrupt flow. That's a general rule for all writing.
Try to find multiple themes and try to better yourself. Write from points of view that are different than you normally do. This adds variation to your work and improves your poetry skills. Also to add onto this, change the structure and rhythmic devices you use in the creation of your poems so that each is unique.
Try to take something that's really dear to your heart, a strong emotion or feeling. If you place that into words, it always makes the best poetry. If you want I can give you a few examples of this. I just ran a poetry contest (As you know) so I don't just have a list of my own works to show you. I can show you a few peoples styles :P

Don't get me wrong though, I did like this poem :D You just asked for my help so I gave it. These are some of the things that helped me, they might not work for you, but hopefully they will! If they do, you'll blow past me as a poet in no time!

Wow. Just wow. This is unbelievable. To be completely honest, I've never known anyone with this much talent at such a young age! The ending was pure genius, the bits where you explained what forget-me-nots are is incredible, the last two lines are just utter perfection to me. If I had to pick two fictitious people that it'd be perfect for, i'd say that it reminds me of Katniss and Peeta's love (from The Hunger Games book series) because their love for eachother will never go away just like the 'flower planted in the soul' in your poem (:

You're welcome.

thanks!

This is amazing. :)