Please marry me? I'm seriously asking for your hand in marriage. I'm willing to give you inspiration for the rest of my life if it means you'll get your creative juices flowing.
The first two lines of the first stanza amde me think of you. Bad image! Disappear. I'd never wnat you to cut your wrists, dying and angels crying above you. Never! I really wonder what and how you felt when you wrote this.
both like rives I think you meant, rivers instead of rives.
The first stanza is drawing a very strong image while the one following explains the unbearable pain along with a comparison.
The third stanza starts with the statement that the narrator is strong, but I can't see that. I can only see a weak person, otehrwise they would have never cut themselves.
The last stanza returns to connect gracefully to the first two stanzas, with the first line. The narrator is dyign and the angel will be the only ones seeing the light fading from her eyes.
That was a very sad piece with great imagery. Well done!
The first two lines of the first stanza amde me think of you.
both like rives
I think you meant, rivers instead of rives.
The first stanza is drawing a very strong image while the one following explains the unbearable pain along with a comparison.
The third stanza starts with the statement that the narrator is strong, but I can't see that. I can only see a weak person, otehrwise they would have never cut themselves.
The last stanza returns to connect gracefully to the first two stanzas, with the first line. The narrator is dyign and the angel will be the only ones seeing the light fading from her eyes.
That was a very sad piece with great imagery. Well done!
-Maria. :)