I quite like this. I love how you associate anger with tears, because most people only do sorrow with tears. I'm not sure about the middle line; the flow just doesn't seem right. Maybe swap some words around or something. Here are a few suggestions:
- "Blocking our eyes with anger."
- "Our eyes full of anger."
- "Our eyes damp with anger."
The middle line was the only bit I had a problem with. The rest was pretty good!
- "Blocking our eyes with anger."
- "Our eyes full of anger."
- "Our eyes damp with anger."
The middle line was the only bit I had a problem with. The rest was pretty good!