Hyperventilate - Comments

@ carousels;
Thank you for the comment and especially for the constructive criticism! Looking back it all is a bit abrupt so I'll definitely check it out and be more aware of that. Thanks again!

And thank you for the comment on The Hermit, too!

These are some really pretty lyrics, and I would thoroughly enjoy it if someone would sing this. Your rhyming is really well done too, and it had a steady rhythm throughout it. Also, I loved the lyrics, but I think you could build up into the end since it is only four stanzas wen you start telling the person to leave you alone and leave you be. Besides that, I found this really enjoyable, and it's definitely well written.

Not one of your best work? I think it sounds pretty sweet. I would love to actually hear music put to it. I mean, I have a beat imagined, but probably doesn't compare to the one you have.