I love this! I like how you put two perspectives in the same poem, it adds a great element to the poem. Mostly, it adds perspective to more than one person which adds great depth. I'm not too keen on the last like, only because I'm not sure how well it fits. If you would have ended it with "If only they knew, they aren't the only one." I think it may have been more powerful, but that's only one persons opinion and I still think you did an amazing job on the poem.
May 15th, 2012 at 08:59pm
