What the Rain Does - Comments

The imagery is fantastic. I find it hard to picture some of the descriptions you used, such as the water melting on the grass, but I suppose that is just a personal thing. I am confused by the "kissed with a sun shower's mutters" part. Kept trying to re-read it only to still not understand what you were trying to depict with this personification. I love how you took the stereotypical rose with water droplet image and made it unique. Hard to write about roses without sounding like everyone else =P

This is beautiful! :)

Described and written astoundingly!

This is a stunning piece, just first of all.

I feel like the general flow is choppy, but it totally works and complements this piece. It really emphasises the specific descriptions and verbs.

Your word choice as a whole is excellent and creates such vivid imagery. I think my favourite is actually the first line, "The way it melts on the tongues of the grass."
Your verb use truly takes the cake though. Spectacular. The third stanza gave me chills.

As other users have mentioned, the rhyming is also really effective. There's a certain charisma in its irregularity that I can't describe. But it's super cool, for lack of a better term.

Great job!

I love the way it feels to read this. It feels sort of like zig zags, kind of like slow, slurred speech. The imagery is so lovely, and all the words together feel so nice. It just feels so great to read this.

Again, such vivid imagery and description. I can picture every line in my head perfectly. You're subtle rhyming is definitely my favorite. Just amazing. ^_^.

I am not a fan of free verse or enjambment, really, but the imagery of this is lovely.
If not for the title, I like how some of the descriptions are obscure, and could take a while to figure out what it really is about.
Well done.

Beautiful, I love when it rains. All dark and wet, makes the house feel that much more cozy...And there isn't a dang sun shining in your face, like "I'm going to hurt your eyes, burn your skin, and make you overall uncomfortable"

Woah. I could paint a perfect clear picture in my head. o:

The best poem I've read in a very LONG time on Mibba. YAY. I'm glad you commented on my journal!

My favorite one so far. I'm in love with description, and this...this is just perfect. It forms such a clear image in my mind. Honestly, I do kind of like the fact that the rhyming in this poem was a little inconsistent. Usually, that would be a pet peeve, but it just flows together so well that it works for me. The last stanza is just beautiful. Amazing job. :D

I formed such a vivid mental picture in my head fr each action you describe the rain doing. This poem is so beautiful. I adore your phrasing here, and the subtle rhyme scheme really proves your talent. I can't even pick out a favorite line, because all of them are beautiful.

You have such a great talent for evoking great imagery! I loved the lines

"The way it forms a mist on tin
rooftops kissed with a sun shower's"

That was just so gorgeous to me because I could picture it so realistically in my head. There isn't anything I could suggest that would make this any better than it already is. Great job!

This is really beautiful. Amazing poetry.

Wow, this is really gorgeous, I can't even... It's just amazing.