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  • lovelyacoustic

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    i started to read this as a person making breakfast...it doesn't work so much at the end. but i really enjoyed your symbolism and phrasing. very well done darlin!!! :)
    April 3rd, 2013 at 05:13pm
  • Tree Tall

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    This is really good, you explained it without it being too obvious about it. I really liked that you said 'a shell starts to crack' because it gives the impression that the person is very vulnerable without mentioning their feelings at all. Really good job!
    June 24th, 2012 at 11:30pm
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    wow i love it!
    June 22nd, 2012 at 03:07am
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