October 23rd, 2012 at 01:11am
This is a beautiful piece, there's just one thing I have to say (don't hate me, but that's kinda what this site's all about, right?): there seems to be a rhythm to the piece that's there one moment, but then just disapears. The rhythm may not have been intentional, but when its there and then gone and then back again, it kinda distracts a bit. That and since the title is "Sariah's Lullaby" you kinda expect some sort of rhythm. Other than that, thought, I find this a very lovely piece and I enjoyed reading it!
~Keep Writing!
Yeah, I admit it sounds kind off on paper, but I actually put it to a song with my guitar, so it's one of those things you have to hear in person. It sounds better to me at least (; thanks for the feedback, always appreciated.