Its a nice poem overall- but I feel like you repeated 'I' a little too much. xD I also feel like the structure of it jumps in the first two stanzas a bit drastically. (from 'and probably one of my best friends / what she doesnt understand was..') but that could be because I read punctuation in poetry. xD Slight spelling mistake with 'raine'. Overall I do enjoy your last two stanzas. Beautiful imagery.
October 21st, 2012 at 10:56am