Moon Flower - Comments

@ Forbidden_Samurai
Thank you sooo much. hmmm... More like a paragraph?.... so you prefer stanzas? or more like acrostic lol? But yes please do check out my other poems :) And I shall check out yours.

What beautiful imagry! You pulled me in with your title (I love Moon Flowers), but I was slightly disappointed when I saw the actual piece-I'm a little against this type of style where the poem looks more like a paragraph than a poem. However, I set aside my adversion and read the piece anyway and though I'm still against this style, I loved the poetic-ness of your words. I have read through the past comments and find myself wondering if you'll continue working with this piece with other styles to see where it will go...
At any rate, I will continue to look for your pieces and I hope you will
~Keep writing!

@ Harleen.
totally. :) and you can suscribe I think. Why are you in the hospital? :P and I'd love to read your entry.

Definitely! I wish i could subscribe to your poetry so I knew when you updated. Or.. Can I? :p I'm laid up in the hospital so I'm itching for something good to read. Joined a contest and need some inspiration. Maybe you could read over it for me when I'm done?

@ Harleen.
Thank you could you observe my other poems too? :) If you want of course.

Wow. This is good. (:

Will you compose a song? :) with my lyrics? I could play guitar! Lolz that would be awesome!

@ dfident
If it's not your style, don't stick to it. I mean, it's good for once in a while, but it's obvious that you like free-verse more. Oh my goodness, you will get tired of reading my poems. I have over 200 on here, I think. >///< But I do really like this poem. It kind of weirds me out saying "poem", though, because most of your work reminds me of lyrics.

@ Meru21
:) I will make sure to comment on eveyr single one! :) And have all my friends do the same or at least some! And I mean I like this style. I truly do, but it didn't feel like a perfect flow for me. But I do love the imagery.

@ dfident
I know how you feel. =_= I never get constructive criticism. lol. Well, most people don't even comment on anything I write, but that's okay. And, yes! I like this style more. You're more honest, it feels.

@ Meru21
Thank you. It did feel a little corny in the beggining. Thank you. This is the critizism I need. You know how you always ask for real opinions and no one gives any. This is wonderful thank you. Comments like these are more valuable than the poem itself. and you like this style more? Hmmm... okay.

I liked this style for you more than the way you normally write. You really stretched your imagination and it shows, though it doesn't seem forced all over. It seems rather frustrated in the beginning, as if you were searching for explicit and descriptive words purposefully. The last four lines seemed easier on you--like you just let it flow finally. Loved them.

@ the 1n5p1ration
Thank you! :) Thought I'd go a little imagery.

Beautiful poem! I can almost see myself out in a grassy field, watching this happen. Wish I could, actually. I love it!