7 Sinful Rhythms - Comments

I really do like it. Usually I don't care for ryhmes but it flowed so nicely in this poem. I did notice that the ryhme disappeared and then came back for the last few lines, I don't know if that's intentionally but it kinda broke the flow and pace you were creating. Otherwise it was really great.

Beautiful. The only mistake I see is in the sixth line. Instead of "my" it should be "me". Otherwise, great job. This is excellent writing.