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  • justeva.

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    I really do like it. Usually I don't care for ryhmes but it flowed so nicely in this poem. I did notice that the ryhme disappeared and then came back for the last few lines, I don't know if that's intentionally but it kinda broke the flow and pace you were creating. Otherwise it was really great.
    April 13th, 2013 at 08:42pm
  • Shattered_Mirror

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    Beautiful. The only mistake I see is in the sixth line. Instead of "my" it should be "me". Otherwise, great job. This is excellent writing.
    April 13th, 2013 at 10:27am
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