Growing Up - Comments

I love this poem and how sad it is. Really, you've given your readers something to be inspired about with the style of your writing.

You've given such an impact when you've described about the setting and the characters that played in it. The description was just astounding and I applaud you for that.

@ FloatingInThePast
Thanks for the suggestion. I'll use it.

I think this poem is wrenchingly wonderful. I love the imagery of "scoops of chocolate" for her eyes, if found that especially effecting. The line where you write "turn into Lucifer black holes" gave me some trouble. at first I thought you meant "Lucifer's" black holes. But then I realized you were describing the holes with Lucifer. It is a little hard to read when put in that syntax so, if I may make a suggestion, I would change it to "holes black like (or as) Lucifer".