He Loves Me. - Comments

I’m here as the new judge for the ‘Pre-Writes #2’ contest.

This is such a nice poem with a lot of different elements to it. There’s a sense of love and comfort, but also this tone of insecurity and question. I feel like you really captured that feeling when you think your significant other is just too good for you, like they deserve better. You did it in so little words, too. I immediately connected with the narrator and with their relationship so I felt all of these emotions. It made me so sad that they’re loved so clearly, but also don’t think they deserve it.

I’m not sure if it was a purposeful stylistic thing, but I really love how you capitalized ‘mistakes’, ‘faults’, and ‘regrets’ rather than lowercase because they were technically part of the sentence before. It put a heavy emphasis on these things, strengthening that unmistakable love hidden between the lines.

This was a really beautiful and simple poem so fantastic job.

This was a really simple poem, and there weren't many words involved. But the feelings you put into this were fantastic. It was happy, yet sad and you found that nice, healthy balance. I think we all want somebody to love who will be there for us, but when they do come, it's very hard to deal with it sometimes and you definitely wrote that feeling accurately.

The ending broke my heart, because I think we can all relate--because so often when we love someone we wonder why they love us and you hit that feeling right on the nose.

Good job and I hope you decide to write more poetry. It's really lovely.

Aw, this was really cute but sad in a way. I loved how you described how he loved the girl, when she falls or cries and especially when he takes her to bed - I thought that was really sweet of him. I also loved how, despite anything that may come across the couple, with the regrets and the mistakes and that, he loves her anyways and I think it is the type of love many girls can aspire or relate to. The end just broke my heart though, you can tell that the girl's insecure because has to question his love for her, despite all the love you just described to us. Overall, I thought this was nicely written. Good job!