Memories - Comments

ooo i got a name.
My Unspoken Pain
idk. it could be lame.
but i think its freakin awesome!

hmmm. maybe im stupid.
but wat did you change???

So much better!! It flows a lot better and now you can read more into it. I liked it very much. =]

Wow! This is really good

this is good. id say 7/10 because some parts sound a little forced. like "forever I will be hating/ them, because they lied" it doesnt fit.
but it is good! i liked it.

grr! lolz

i think it rhymes

sorry. fine!
ummm its great 10/10
well naturally i'm gonna say that.
since i wrote some of it!
but ya its great.
duhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh.
and i agree with nailthenextfool.
it needs rhyming help.
take it to a doctor or something
cuz your poem is sick!

private message.

now comment!!!

I like the overall sound of it and the subject. The only thing I'd say would be to try and change up the rhythm and rhyming scheme a bit.

what does PM mean??

please rate it and PM me with any ideas! especially about the title!
my current title's kinda lame