Magic Act - Comments

@ January Rose
Thanks!

Sorry, posted twice.

Wow, this was amazing. I don't read poems very often but I'm glad I read yours. It was so descriptive and emotional I could step into the character's shoes. Awesome job on this and please write more poems!

@ sheepcat;

Oh wow, well, I'll keep a look out anyway just in case you decide to again, because it really was fantastic!
And you're welcome C:

@ AliceHumanSacrifice.
Thank you I doubt I'll be posting any more poems though, this took me almost four hours.

I have to say, wow. That was really good. It flowed so nicely together, it's like I could see it playing in my head you know? It was such a light read, and the ending, in italics, killed me. That's a good thing haha. It was just a great ending for the poem I think, you really did a good job. I'll be subscribing for more poems. Job well done C:

@ sheepcat;
You're welcome

@ BringMeTheFuentes
Thank you.

This is really amazing! I love how in the first verse ''The only type of Magic act I'm good at is disappearing'' my first thought was that's exactly how I feel! You should really write more Poems like this one! I will deff. Read more! Also, I really love the ending, It's genious:)

This is really amazing! I love how in the first verse ''The only type of Magic act I'm good at is disappearing'' my first thought was that's exactly how I feel! You should really write more Poems like this one! I will deff. Read more! Also, I really love the ending, It's genious:)

@ aubree james.
Thank you so much, even more so for the layout suggestion - I'll go and fix that up.

That was beyond beautiful. At the end of the poem I sort of felt that I was being dropped as the character was. It's haunting.

What I appreciate about this poem is the proper use of parallel structure. I love how each stanza reflects upon the last and builds onto it only in a way that compliments it. Also, the allusion to her becoming 'blindingly light' while she falls from heavens clouds is remarkable. It is a definitely a well thought out play of words and ideas.

The only thing I'd change is the layout. While I understand that a recurring theme in this poem is light colours 'pale blending to white'. The white on white is a bit difficult to read.

That was beyond beautiful. At the end of the poem I sort of felt that I was being dropped as the character was. It's haunting.

What I appreciate about this poem is the proper use of parallel structure. I love how each stanza reflects upon the last and builds onto it only in a way that compliments it. Also, the allusion to her becoming 'blindingly light' while she falls from heavens clouds is remarkable. It is a definitely a well thought out play of words and ideas.

The only thing I'd change is the layout. While I understand that a recurring theme in this poem is light colours 'pale blending to white'. The white on white is a bit difficult to read.

Of course, dear ~

@ arthur dent
Oh my god, thank you so much.

First off, the layout is gorgeous and it fits perfectly.
Second, I love your imagery.
Every verse is clear and bittersweet and I love it.
Also, the repetition in the first and last verses was some of the seriously best I've ever read. Altogether it's soft and broken while slightly disconnected with reality━a beautiful short story. I like poems. And your media. Therefore I like this, a lot. Keep writing. ~

@ Tholomew Plague
Thank you.

Woah. I really like the amount of emotion this invokes, even just in a few simple words. I can relate to it, and it portray's a very vivid image.

My favourite part however, has to be the end.

the only type of magic act
i'm good at is
leaving you

all because you let go of me.

To me, it seems solid, and rings true. I really like it :D

@ vulcan;
Thank you. Doesn't matter if it's sucky feedback, at least it's feedback.

I'm not good at poetry, sorry if this sucks

I can really feel the emotion here. It's strong and meaningful. I don't really have any negative feedback other than it's a little choppy, but that's a complaint I have about almost all poetry. This was really good.