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  • savvy0yonks

    savvy0yonks (100)

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    Instead of "And broken toys are only half the fun."
    try "and broken toys are a waste of time"
    it still follows the rules for a haiku yet it adds a lot of power to piece like this.... hopefully you try it..
    December 27th, 2013 at 01:58am
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