Very good. I love that it the man who tryes to do right; to offten we forget that men arent the only ones who do abues
January 10th, 2014 at 07:08am
When I read the first few lines, I wasn't expecting the rest of the poem to turn out the way it did. How she treats him, it's obviously an unhealthy relationship, and yet he somehow forgives and loves her. (Which might crazy to others but sometimes that's what happens in situations like these.)
I liked how you actually wrote the word senses (see/taste) before describing the scene and then finally wrapping them all up with 'feel.' I think the last line really wraps up the whole thing. Overall, I enjoyed it.
