This is so simple and melodic; the romantic style is just incredible. You do a great job creating a rhyme that isn't cheesy or forced like is often the result of someone rhyming a poem. I greatly appreciate your use of cliche for the same reason: it flows well and isn't overdone. And although the idea isn't necessarily new, the language and the way you write it is very unique. The idea that you must keep patience to receive that love that people strive for is so very important. People rush through and force relationships thinking that it's the only way they'll find what they're looking for, while you portray the more accurate picture: fate will come in eventuality. The imagery you use, especially when talking about the souls, is also to be commended. Although no one knows precisely what a soul actually looks like, you get a beautiful image in your head from how you describe the motion, which is the most important part. Overall this is a great poem; job well done!
May 2nd, 2014 at 05:45pm
