I love this poem, it's that simple. I just do. I think you are a very talented writer and I am glad I had the chance to read this. I think your title really works with this poem and highlights the most important part of the poem, which is control. Your title is perfect. This poem SCREAMS control and that's what I wanted from this. That is how you properly convey an emotion in a poem, and I adore that. You used the right words to support that emotion. It's such a powerful emotion, and you managed to make a really powerful poem.
Where I think the poem faltered a little bit was on the fluidity aspect. I found myself being a little off when reading the poem because I felt that the flow was a little off. I can't even pin point what exactly about the poem makes the flow lack, but it is lacking. It sadly took away from the overall appreciation of the poem.
Overall, I think you created an insanely good poem. Truly stellar!
I love this poem, it's that simple. I just do. I think you are a very talented writer and I am glad I had the chance to read this. I think your title really works with this poem and highlights the most important part of the poem, which is control. Your title is perfect. This poem SCREAMS control and that's what I wanted from this. That is how you properly convey an emotion in a poem, and I adore that. You used the right words to support that emotion. It's such a powerful emotion, and you managed to make a really powerful poem.
Where I think the poem faltered a little bit was on the fluidity aspect. I found myself being a little off when reading the poem because I felt that the flow was a little off. I can't even pin point what exactly about the poem makes the flow lack, but it is lacking. It sadly took away from the overall appreciation of the poem.
Overall, I think you created an insanely good poem. Truly stellar!