August 19th, 2015 at 02:10am
With a Single Touch - Comments
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Hi, judge's comment here! First of all, I must compliment you on how structured this piece is. It has definite shape and organization while still flowing and reading naturally. Secondly, you followed the prompt very well: I appreciate how you made it all about the general idea of the story, rather than about a particular character of it. That shows great originality and a unique perspective. The parallel structure in addition to the rhyme also helped keep it to feel almost...clean. I'm not entirely sure that's the right word, but I'm sure you get my gist. This piece also demonstrates a very interesting pattern of growth over time, which is aesthetically pleasing as you read it. Overall you really did an excellent job with this poem; I didn't notice any grammatical abnormalities or anything of the like. Great work! May 21st, 2014 at 02:47am
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This was awesome! May 11th, 2014 at 08:04am
I love how reassuring it is - it's truthful but hopeful: 'And though, on occasion, you'll have a rough patch, love conquers all, when you've the perfect match.'
Before I realised that this was a fan-fiction I was confused by the iMate but the poem explains it really well as it goes which is great!
I also love the layout, it's so delicate and calm; it's also simple which perfectly reflects what it conveys - that love is simple with the iMate.
It's like a perfect advert!