Hi, judge's comment here! This was a very deep and sad poem, but beautifully crafted. Before I get to what I thought was so great about it, I just want to point out a few things that you could've improved. The first line of the second stanza is written the passive voice while none of the other lines are. If you did it intentionally, okay. If not, for a better flow, I would suggest changing it to "Some say there is still hope," or something along those lines. Also, to connect it to the second line of that stanza, there should be a conjunction.
ex. Some say there is still hope, But how can there be hope?
Now, on to all of the things you did well, which was certainly a lot. I like how each stanza has it's own focus, or point, while still creating a cohesive piece. You wrote your breaks in very well so that it still flows, and you continue the idea of a lost spirit throughout, although only outwardly stating it once. The last stanza is particularly powerful; I believe that the personification of sadness has a lot to do with that.
Overall, I could tell this was a heartfelt piece that aptly paid tribute to the character that it was meant to, as a poem fanfic. Congrats on a great entry!
ex. Some say there is still hope,
But how can there be hope?
Now, on to all of the things you did well, which was certainly a lot. I like how each stanza has it's own focus, or point, while still creating a cohesive piece. You wrote your breaks in very well so that it still flows, and you continue the idea of a lost spirit throughout, although only outwardly stating it once. The last stanza is particularly powerful; I believe that the personification of sadness has a lot to do with that.
Overall, I could tell this was a heartfelt piece that aptly paid tribute to the character that it was meant to, as a poem fanfic. Congrats on a great entry!