Whisper - Comments

@ C418
No problem.

@ DarkestStorm
Thank you!

I love your imagery in this and how you're so vivid with the colors describing "home". It's amazing how this kind of starts out as a "positive" poem but then turns sad at the end. I'm a fan of repetition in poetry so I really liked that part. Normally I'd mention something about the use of punctuation and capitalization, but I think the lack of it suits this piece nicely. I think it helps the tone too. The rhyming in the fifth stanza kind of throws the piece off a little, but I think it's fine. Wow, those last two lines are great. Good job on this.

@ MirageOnTheHorizon
Thanks, again. I have a soft spot for dark poetry.

Excuse my language but Fing wow man. Beautifully dark poem the writing style of this one sucked me in.