Paper Wings - Comments

I really love how this poem had a message while still being a poem. I absolutely love how the words flowed to form this fragile and delicate imagery of these paper wings. But after I finished the last line I couldn’t feel sorry for this girl. She had the strength to stand up so instead of pity I felt awe. That was another thing that was great about this piece; while most of the poem expressed her fragility, it wasn’t until the last few lines that showed her strength. That in itself was like a nice surprise…I don’t know if this was your goal but I liked it either way. Great job!!

I also love the layout and the picture…I like simplicity, and this layout is just right.
Again, great job and thanks for sharing!!!

Sorry for the double post. Mibba was being weird.

This seems almost as much a drabble as a poem to me. I like the story it tells and its message. In terms of the actual words/writing, I think your opening lines and you closing lines are the strongest and are definitely my favorite part of the piece.