I'm Not Her - Comments

I hope nothing like that happens again to you. I know, sometimes its different how others think over what we've written. I can tell from my work.

@ XXXataktoulaXXX
It's really interesting to hear how other people read your work.
I never intended it to be read like that but now I read over it I can definitely see where you're coming from.

I wrote this when I was seeing someone.
He never took me out, never held my hand.
I never met his parents, I was just this secret to him.
I was just there to fill the void until someone better came along, and I knew it from the start.

Thank you for your outlook, I appreciate it!

The truth is that the first four stanzas make the poem seem like the narrator loves that person deeply and knows so much about the person she loves that she looks like a stalker. And there comes the ending which takes our attention away from what we thought the poem was about and shows that she is actually his girlfriend but she knows she will be replaced soon when the girl he wants arrives.

It seems a bit complicated, might be because of the way you wrote it - but still, it was a good surprise at the end. I mean, good surprise with the way you changed our attention to a different thing.

Anyways, this poem was a good one.

-Maria. :)