A Mother's Song - Comments

  • abigail.

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    I really loved this. It put my mind in a different place, reminding me of my heritage and my ancestors (Cherokee, not Choctaw, but the point stands)

    There's always something so beautiful about different languages being combined to get a point across. I agree with Midna on this. Airy, but still powerful, which I believe is what makes this work so well.
    March 16th, 2016 at 03:47am
  • lost em.

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    This is beautiful and I feel like it's so lighthearted yet the punch is still powerful. And the language usage is perfect!
    March 16th, 2016 at 03:18am
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    What a lovely poem! OMGYES

    I adore your use of the Choctaw language and how you incorporated it into the poem. It blended in really well with the English words and seemed almost seamless. It felt like a very soft and loving poem, and I can only imagine how it would sound in the spoken form. In Love

    I greatly enjoyed this, thank you for sharing it!
    June 18th, 2015 at 04:37am
  • Unown

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    This is lovely!
    Once again, I'm in love with the layout! In Love

    I really like the use of the words of the Choctaw language in here; the words seem comforting and make me want to read on.

    Lovely use of punctuation!
    June 17th, 2015 at 07:20am