I'm quite the fan of repetition, and you used it well here. The ambiguity of the poem also makes it so ubiquitous, like this poem can have so many meanings to so many different people.
I think my favorite stanza is the second one because of how you chose to represent the "obstacle". There's always something holding you back, like "running with lead shoes". You acknowledge the problem, but it's still there.
I think my favorite stanza is the second one because of how you chose to represent the "obstacle". There's always something holding you back, like "running with lead shoes". You acknowledge the problem, but it's still there.
Lovely poem!