Beautiful Cosmos - Comments

  • mmooney

    mmooney (100)

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    LOVE THIS! when I read it the only line that made me have to read it over again is when you say 'In his eyes shone Moon And her lover, Sun'. Maybe say in his eyes shone the Moon? Make it flow better
    January 14th, 2018 at 01:27am