Excuse my French, but holy shit. That was just a beautiful poem. I absolutely adore the vocabulary in this and the way it all flows, the way you repeat certain phrases but not too often and in seemingly the perfect places. I also love how you have to sort of re-read it to sort of analyze it and the message, but that might just be because I'm an English major and actually like analyzing writing. It's really a piece that grabs your attention for sure and doesn't want to let you go.
Amazingly, beautifully done!!