Sadness the Devil - Comments

  • qblinux

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    Hi, Skyylar.

    I love your story "Cuz.".

    Like a diary.

    What does "Cuz." mean actually?

    How long have you been writing?

    Have you read "Princess Diaries Series" written by Meg Cabot?

    Yeah, your "Cuz." remains me that series.

    And I love that series.

    So I think I would love your "Cuz.".

    So keep going Sky.

    If you haven't read the series, I will show its first diary here.

    **************************************
    Tuesday, September 23

    Sometimes it seems like all I ever do is lie.

    My mom thinks I’m repressing my feelings about this.

    I say to her, "No, Mom, I’m not. I think it’s really neat. As long as you’re happy, I’m happy."

    Mom says, "I don’t think you’re being honest with me."

    Then she hands me this book.

    She tells me she wants me to write down my feelings in this book, since, she says, I obviously don’t feel I can talk about them with her.

    She wants me to write down my feelings? Okay, I’ll write down my feelings:

    I CAN’T BELIEVE SHE’S DOING THIS TO ME!

    Like everybody doesn’t already think I’m a freak.

    I’m practically the biggest freak in the entire school.

    I mean, let’s face it: I’m five foot nine, flat-chested, and a freshman.

    How much more of a freak could I be? If people at school find out about this, I’m dead. That’s it. Dead.

    Oh, God, if you really do exist, please don’t let them find out about this.

    There are four million people in Manhattan, right? That makes about two million of them guys.

    So out of TWO MILLION guys, she has to go out with Mr. Gianini.

    She can’t go out with some guy I don’t know.

    She can’t go out with some guy she met at D’Agostinos or wherever. Oh, no. She has to go out with my Algebra teacher.

    Thanks, Mom. Thanks a whole lot.

    ********************************************

    I read the book three years ago, during this period of time, I have read couples of other books, I still think it is neat, if I was a girl, I would be doing writing in this way, and you are a girl, sooo, what do you think?

    By the way, You should have added some line-breaker or blank line between lines in your writings.

    Thanks for your work, talk to you soon!
    May 8th, 2019 at 06:58am
  • fireflame9856

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    @ qblinux
    ye 13 years old
    May 8th, 2019 at 02:25am
  • qblinux

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    Wow, Skyylar.

    Your first poem on Mibba?

    And you really 13 years old?

    Wow.
    May 7th, 2019 at 09:10am