How To Tell a Hideaway That Freedom is Better than Safety (long version) - Comments

ya its soooo great and worth reading
keep it up dude -_^

I really like it....Its so cool yet weird yet amazing haha but really,......its great

So beautiful. I really am speechless. I tried to look for something to criticize, and it's so close to impossible. If you're itching for ANYTHING I would say this line tripped me up the slightest bit:
[i]"For he fills them with the pain within"[/i]

Saying with twice might be a little much for one line, just something to think about. Honestly, you could leave it and it'd be great anyway- trust me.
-Julie