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  • BeyondBirthday

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    It's not choppy
    couplets are classic form to pair off thoughts
    I like it, it's simplistic :)
    March 28th, 2009 at 07:36pm
  • Feefer!

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    Um... It was kinda choppy... I think it could be better, but like this it is okay. Not bad. Not at all! Just, it could be better. It kinda confused me[with the choppiness].
    August 18th, 2008 at 07:47pm
  • crackers7

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    It's pretty good. I think I understand what you are saying. You hate something, your living in what you hate, and your afraid you will become what you hated. I think. Right?
    Anyways, I like this poem.
    July 18th, 2008 at 06:46am
  • V. Valo

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    Dude, if you put these lyrics to some heavy beats it would be amazing!
    July 4th, 2008 at 03:53am
  • possession

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    Comment people please, I want you to criticize my work, so I can get better..
    June 19th, 2008 at 07:25pm
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