I love the way you use rhyme without making it seem forced or child-like. Such as 'the road is long/and rather weary/but never shall her eyes grow dreary.' It seeems to fit really naturally.
I'm not sure what you mean by 'she prays for understand', though - or maybe I'm just reading it wrong?
I also think the way you isolated the last word, 'deliverance', was really effective.
I'm not sure what you mean by 'she prays for understand', though - or maybe I'm just reading it wrong?
I also think the way you isolated the last word, 'deliverance', was really effective.