There were quite a few small mistakes that an editor could have found:
New "freedom" creates chaos
smell of doubt is all around
going nowhere
coming from the same
have we been [b]misslead[/b]?
insanity and confusion is cried out
seems once again we are all lost in space
strange faces driving us insane
you know [b]to[/b] much
your life is getting short
built like massive bomb
just to be [b]autodestroyed[/b]
[b]desperation[/b] tears, hate screams
[b]to[/b] much fear to fight in the dark
fate smashed against lack of stars
castles made of dreams
[b]floting[/b] smoothly in the air
vanished with [b]memorys[/b] of yesterday
bullets rest in the ground
blood spilled and [b]i didnt[/b] even [b]heard[/b] a sound
once again fears [b]beated[/b] peace
hate defeats dreams
[b]its[/b] all the same shit
names are the only [b]thing that changes[/b]
mislead
too
not a word; destroyed
do you mean desperation, tears?
if you didn't then it is just [b]desperate[/b]
too
floating
memories
I is always capitalized
didn't always must have an apostraphe
hear not heard
beated isn't a word, and if it is it doesn't work there; it should be won
do you mean things that change? [i]names[/i] is plural, so [i]things[/i] must be as well; otherwise it would be "name is the only thing that changes" and that is incomplete.
There were quite a few small mistakes that an editor could have found:
New "freedom" creates chaos
smell of doubt is all around
going nowhere
coming from the same
have we been [b]misslead[/b]?
insanity and confusion is cried out
seems once again we are all lost in space
strange faces driving us insane
you know [b]to[/b] much
your life is getting short
built like massive bomb
just to be [b]autodestroyed[/b]
[b]desperation[/b] tears, hate screams
[b]to[/b] much fear to fight in the dark
fate smashed against lack of stars
castles made of dreams
[b]floting[/b] smoothly in the air
vanished with [b]memorys[/b] of yesterday
bullets rest in the ground
blood spilled and [b]i didnt[/b] even [b]heard[/b] a sound
once again fears [b]beated[/b] peace
hate defeats dreams
[b]its[/b] all the same shit
names are the only [b]thing that changes[/b]
mislead
too
not a word; destroyed
do you mean desperation, tears?
if you didn't then it is just [b]desperate[/b]
too
floating
memories
I is always capitalized
didn't always must have an apostraphe
hear not heard
beated isn't a word, and if it is it doesn't work there; it should be won
do you mean things that change? [i]names[/i] is plural, so [i]things[/i] must be as well; otherwise it would be "name is the only thing that changes" and that is incomplete.
Other than that, it's a good poem. =)