Poor Little Annie, and her Friend The Fly - Comments

lol i've never read anything like this. that's crazy, about the fruit fly. XD
it was really funny...but in a creepy way...or vice versa. that's good.
a few of the lines seem kind of awkward, though, like you have to read them a couple of times to get into the rhythm of them - but then again, i suck at rhyming, so i think you made a good effort to keep it constant.

I like how this has a childish, almost nursery rhyme feel to it, and how quirky the subject matter is, but I think it might be too short or too vague, and end too abruptly for it's own good.

wow there are like a million ways i could interpret this
its delicious

It's interesting, but somehow I still seem detached from the poem. >.<