Losing it? - Comments

  • Leah...

    Leah... (100)

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    I like it, but it seems a bit too repeated.
    The concept is amazing and its a good topic to write poems on.

    A good tip if you didnt already know: Don't try writing the poem, let the poem flow from your thoughts and feelings to the paper or computer through your fingers. You'll find the best, raw material that way. And then if you wanna tone it up you could edit it.

    Just a thought from a fellow poet:)
    Keep it up, maybe youll come out with something amazing:)
    February 5th, 2011 at 07:55am
  • teenieella

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    Great way of capturing the emotion. Its short and to the point but it describes, showing instead of telling. good job.
    March 1st, 2009 at 03:53pm
  • Syd Barrett.

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    Very good poem. I completely know how that feels. Well-written. :)
    December 4th, 2008 at 04:45am
  • Gibbers

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    that's pretty awesome. :)
    I hate that feeling.
    Great job putting it into words that's always my problem.
    November 30th, 2008 at 12:03am