Moonlit - Comments

@ freckles.
haha, thank you! i appreciate it! very glad you liked this old thing xD

I want to bottle this poem up and wear it as a perfume.

I want to bottle this poem up and wear it as a perfume.

Wow.
Wow.
Wow.

Okay. So. um. Can we take a few moments to admire these two lines?

"Soon I'm gone without a trace, lost in my own forehead's lines..."

"but unlike me, I'm ugly, the moonlight is divine"

Those lines are so very beautiful and bittersweet. I almost wish you would write a story just with those two lines like a continuation of your poem because you don't write in ink, you write in fine wine.

Soooo very good, just like always, haha.
This poem is pretty much the equivolent of love.
But it's not the normal kind of love that teens or just anyone in general writes about. Instead of being all fiery with emotion and passion, it's a softer kind of true love, magical almost.
And when someone thinks of love, they usually think of the color red (or at least I do, haha.) But when I read this poem, the color that came to mind was like a unique mix of blue and silver. I have no idea what that means, but it's true, lol.
And moonlit is the perfect title. It's almost as if the narrator is in love with the moon, or maybe just someone who reminds them of the moon, or maybe even they're remembering an experiance when they were with someone they love under the moonlight. Either one of these ways or a totally different one, and I still think the title is perfect and corrosponds with your description very well.
Awesomenesssss. =D

Wow..... I really really really like this poem. Wow....

wow, I really like this one alot. It holds so much emotion...and the end...the end is just amazing.

and I love the description =D.