Your voice is my lullaby; - Comments

very nice, poetic, metaphoric :) <3

i like it. trapped inside your eyes is good, and the way you end it.

I like it-- but it almost seems unfinished-- like I like to end my poems with something solid-- like maybe go on to say "Your voice is my lullaby-- lulling me into placid sleep--" ect ect ect and then maybe something like "Leaving me dreaming... dreaming of forever with you..." or something... just a suggestion though-- pay me no heed if you disagree... You have a nice voice. Try some rhyming next time (a rhyming dictionary is my best friend!) and maybe have a more solid metre? you keep it around 5 syllables per line-- but inexactitude bothers me when I'm writing-- I don't know about you though-- so if I were writing it then I'd probably be like "OMG THIS LINE HAS 6 SYLLABLES! How else can I say that?!" and I think you mean matters instead of matter but otherwise it's very good.
Keep Writing
~Maggie