forever emptiness - Comments

  • jetblackhotelmirror

    jetblackhotelmirror (100)

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    I wrote this when I lost a best friend...and not by death. The only thing that even remotely helped a little was writing this.

    I did eventually receive a fraction of closure when I heard this song 'A Coming of Age Story' by Dropout Year. The words speak exactly what I went through.


    One hell of a heartbreak, maybe I'm one hell of a scar.
    We say these words with heavy hearts,
    you build me up to watch me fall apart.
    And I guess my greatest regret is not just losing you,
    but losing you as a friend.
    I want that back

    So speak your mind,
    tell me why
    we used to share secrets
    and now we share distance.
    We both know this isn't
    the way it should be.

    Let go of the hate, let go of the pain.
    We were kids back then.
    We've made our mistakes,
    now time has changed, we've aged,
    do you still feel the same way.

    Don't make this awkward baby.
    Talk like adults and maybe we'll get some closure,
    or just get over. The passion of those actions that spoke
    louder than words
    than we've ever heard and
    I'm listening.

    So speak your mind,
    tell me why
    we used to share secrets
    and now we share distance.
    We both know this isn't
    the way it should be.

    Let go of the hate,
    let go of the pain.
    We were kids back then.
    We've made our mistakes,
    now time has changed, we've aged,
    do you still feel the same way.

    You were my confidence and
    my only consequence now
    is how
    I'll never forget this.
    You were my confidence and
    my only consequence now
    is how
    you were worth every minute.

    As we tried to say goodbye
    there wasn't a dry eye in the room,
    but then again...
    it was just me and you.

    Let go of the hate,
    let go of the pain.
    We were kids back then.
    We've made our mistakes,
    now time has changed, we've aged,
    do you still feel the same way.
    Cause I still feel...

    Side note:
    If you're familiar w/the Gothic design of a church, catholic or lutheran, the original style is shaped like a cross including the nave, chancel, and wings. (my church is) And Jesus' neck refers to where the coffin is usually placed. The part of the nave just before the chancel--chancel holds the altar and lectern/pulpit.
    January 23rd, 2009 at 10:30am
  • pikachufannumber1

    pikachufannumber1 (100)

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    I know how that feels...I like how you use little details so the reader can put thier own imaginative spin on the visualization and incorporate thier own losses into your words.
    January 17th, 2009 at 10:47pm