The Future Is The Unknown - Comments

  • Surrealistfemme.

    Surrealistfemme. (355)

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    I don't really like the title, I think it is too blunt for the poem itself. You have great style here. Your rhythm although varies would make for a good song. I enjoyed how in some stanzas you would start three lines with the same word or letter, it adds atheistic view to the poem beyond the words.

    My personal favorites lines were:
    How you and I know each other
    Is by the sands of time
    The paths of old
    Trails long left in the past
    Was once a future

    It's paradoxical and quite beautiful. I am surprised you do not have more poetry on this site. Anyway, great job.
    April 6th, 2010 at 06:55pm
  • Bukekang Bukaka

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    BRAVO **
    March 22nd, 2009 at 04:07pm